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新网编辑 教育资讯 3

天气是英语作文里最容易上手、却也最容易写“平”的话题。今天到底该怎么写?写什么角度才能不落俗套?下面用自问自答的方式,拆解一篇高分天气英语作文所需的全部要素。

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Q1:今天天气到底怎样?一句话就能写活

很多同学习惯开头就是“It is sunny today.”,阅卷老师看到立刻审美疲劳。试试把“天气”与“人的即时感受”绑在一起:

  • The moment I opened the curtains, a blade of golden light slashed the sleepy room.
  • Clouds hung so low that the church spire seemed to pierce them like a needle through cotton.

两句话都没有出现“sunny”或“cloudy”,却把天气状态写活了。秘诀:用比喻+动作代替形容词。


Q2:除了“sunny/rainy”,还有哪些高阶词汇可用?

把常见天气词升级,立刻拉开差距:

  1. Scorching 替代 hot
  2. Drizzle 替代 light rain
  3. Gale 替代 strong wind
  4. Overcast 替代 cloudy
  5. Hazy 替代 foggy(轻度雾霾)

例句:A bone-chilling gale whipped the narrow streets, sending crisp leaves cartwheeling into the night.


Q3:怎样把天气写进叙事而不生硬?

天气不能只是背景,要推动情节映射心情

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方法一:天气=冲突导火索

The sudden downpour drenched my only suit, forcing me to enter the interview room dripping like a wet dog.

方法二:天气=情感放大器

As the fog thickened, her silhouette blurred, and I realized how little I truly knew the girl waving goodbye.


Q4:如何描写一天内的天气变化?

用时间轴串联,制造节奏感。

06:00  Dawn broke in watercolor pinks.
09:00  The sun sharpened its blades on the rooftops.
14:00  A brassy heat flattened every shadow.
17:00  Thunder growled behind the hills.
20:00  Rain tapped the windows like impatient fingers.

每句都含动词+感官,画面感层层递进。


Q5:能否用对话展示天气?

当然可以,而且更生动。

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“Grab your coat, the weatherman says it’ll drop below zero tonight.”
“I’d rather freeze than miss the meteor shower.”

短短两句,既交代温度骤降,又暗示人物性格。


Q6:怎样在议论文里引用天气?

把天气当论据,而非装饰。

论点:Climate change is no longer a distant threat.

论据:Last February, cherry blossoms bloomed two weeks early in Kyoto, confusing both tourists and bees.


Q7:有没有万能模板?

模板可以学骨架,但灵魂必须原创

骨架示例

  1. Hook:一句画面感极强的天气描写
  2. Conflict:天气带来的小困境
  3. Development:人物如何应对
  4. Reflection:天气引发的思考
  5. Close:首尾呼应,用天气收束

填充时把“天气”换成任何季节、任何城市,都能成立。


Q8:如何避免语法坑?

  • 时态一致:描述过去天气用一般过去时,描写此刻用现在进行时。
  • 冠词别丢:the sun, a drizzle, an overcast sky。
  • 介词精准:in the rain, under the scorching sun, through the fog。

Q9:高分范文拆解(约120词)

原文:
The sky this morning was a dull pewter, pressing low against the sleepy town. By noon, however, a reckless wind had torn the clouds apart, letting sunlight spill like molten glass across the square. Children abandoned their homework, chasing the sudden warmth between church bells. I sat on the fountain’s rim, feeling the cold stone thaw beneath me, and wondered how many springs I had let slip by unnoticed. When the first drop landed on my notebook, I did not run; I closed my eyes and listened to the rain rehearse its ancient lullaby on the cobblestones.

亮点:

  • 颜色+材质比喻:pewter, molten glass
  • 动词精准:torn, spill, thaw, rehearse
  • 情感升华:从个人感受上升到“时间流逝”

Q10:练习任务

用今天真实的天气写一段80词短文,要求:

  1. 不出现“good/bad weather”
  2. 至少使用一个拟人化动词
  3. 结尾留一个开放式问题

完成后朗读三遍,删掉所有副词,再读一遍,感受文字的张力。

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